3 thoughts on “Home-work

  1. Oh Yasmin, poor Lola! I really like your choice of verbs like ‘peered’ and ‘mumbled’. Great use of the word ‘bewildered’ too. I also like the way you have used a very short sentence (‘Why?’) to add effect.

    I wonder if next time you could think more carefully about some of your sentence openings as you use the word ‘she’ quite a lot. What else could you use or put in front of ‘she’ to vary the way your sentences start?

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